六

　　重复累赘

　　同学们在写书面表达时应尽量做到简洁：写句子没有一个多余的词，写段落没有一个多余的句子。

　　例1：In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.

　　尽管他很懒惰，我还是喜欢他。

　　解析：本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同位语从句，我们可按照“简洁”的原则加以简化。

　　改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him.

　　例2： For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

　　对于勤奋善良的人来说，钱只是用来购买所需东西的工具。

　　解析：整个句子可以大大简化，重复累赘过多。

　　改为：Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.

　　七

　　句子不连贯

　　句子不连贯是指一个句子内部前言不搭后语，或是结构上不畅通。

　　例：The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

　　淡水是地球上最重要的东西。

　　解析：The fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯，it与things在语法上不一致。

　　改为：Fresh water is the most important thing in the world.

　　八

　　结构混乱

　　句子结构混乱主要是受汉语思维方式影响而导致的。同学们在日常学习中应多加练习，培养语感。

　　例1：There are many students are playing basketball on the playground.操场上有许多学生在打篮球。

　　解析：上面的句子中出现了两个谓语动词，不符合英语的语法习惯。

　　改为：Many students are playing basketball on the playground.

　　例2：The girl is standing over there is from a big city.站在那边的女孩来自一个大城市。

　　解析：一个简单句中不能有两个谓语系动词，结构混乱。

　　改为：The girl standing over there is from a big city.

　　九

　　句型单调，缺乏过渡

　　一篇文章如果简单句过多，句型单调，即使语法错误较少，思路较清晰，看后也会使人感到乏味。同学们应学会单句、复句交替使用，经常变换句型，尝试使用一些较复杂的语法结构及句型，适当运用过渡词，使文章更加连贯。

　　例：They sleep fewer than eight hours every day. It has great influence on their health.

　　他们每天睡眠少于八小时，这对他们的健康有很大影响。

　　解析：这段话中使用的全部是简单句，句型比较单调，可以改为定语从句或加入插入语。

　　改为：Actually, they sleep fewer than eight hours every day, which will,no doubt, have great influence on their health.